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LordLuke, August 15th, 2010, 4:41 pm
Bad Day 3 - And that's the end of that chapter!

Ok then, there's a perfectly good reason as to why this didn't go up about half a day ago. I was in London this morning and my back-up plan didn't go so well, so I'm gunna try and make up for it.

You guys stay awesome!

~Luke

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4thWarmasterKais, August 15th, 2010, 5:05 pm
- That is high on the 'Don't wanna be in that position' list XD

MADAGASCAR, August 15th, 2010, 7:57 pm
- Uh, are you alright?

apples, August 15th, 2010, 10:42 pm
- You might want to think about playing more with line weight variation. As of the moment, your lines are rather heavy and too bold, messing with the readability of your work. I've seen you do it, on occasion, but not with really a good level of control or consistency.

A good application off varying line weight is to give an image a greater impression of depth.

The first panel is a good place to analyze this. Your figures, standing closer to us the viewer, have the same line weight as the building in front of them. Looking at the panel casually, it's not immediately discernible what's what. Objects receding from the viewer, further away, should have a notably thinner line than that of an object closer to the viewer, the contrast of these lines giving a new level of depth to the drawing. If your figures were rendered with a bolder line than the building, they would pop out more.

A second thing line weight variation can be applied to is details. I've seen you do it a few times before, but sparingly and not really to any extent. The girl's face in the last panel was done with chunky and cluttered lines, impairing the details and readability of it. Had you worked with a smaller brush, (also think about what I said about depth earlier), her face would've been much clearer. It's best to have thicker outlines on a form with thinner detail lines.

These are suggestions of course, not etched in stone.

I also notice that most of your lines, when working on a certain scale, can be rather shaky. Try practicing drawing with faster, looser strokes and don't be afraid to erase, you probably are not going to get it right the first stroke, but keep at it!

Johnny Whoa, August 15th, 2010, 10:53 pm
- This is awesome. You know what else is awesome? Jakaesi. You should come back to Jakaesi.

cesar (Guest), August 15th, 2010, 11:49 pm
- @apples failed at criticism

Luke I Am Your Mother (Guest), August 16th, 2010, 5:16 am
- On reading this, I just want to let you know that we are getting you a new key cut for our house.........
DONT LOSE IT !!!

LordLuke, August 16th, 2010, 2:52 pm
- @apples won at criticism. I'll put what you suggested into practice, thanks for taking the time to point out where I can improve!

RavinKrowzNest, August 16th, 2010, 5:02 pm
- Wish somebody had a camera there. XD

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